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This exercise focuses on increasing your flexibility in using the language for graphs. Look at the chart below about the number of computers sold at VH Warehouse Ltd over a three year period and the sentences, which follow. Rewrite each sentence using the words given. Note that there may be more than one way of rewriting the sentences.

This exercise focuses on increasing your flexibility in using the language for graphs. Look at the chart below about the number of computers sold at VH Warehouse Ltd over a three year period and the sentences, which follow. Rewrite each sentence using the words given. Note that there may be more than one way of rewriting the sentences.
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The chart gives information about computers sold at VH Warehouse Ltd between 1999 and 2001.
According to
Linking Words
 the chart, the selling computers fluctuated considerably over the period shown, but the figures for selling computers in the early part of 1999 and 2001 decreased gradually. In 1999, sales in the early
quarter
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 reached a peak at 140 before slumping to 60 in the first fourth
quarter
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. There was a speedy recovery in computer sales in the first
quarter
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 of 2000 at 120 followed by a sudden fall in the second
quarter
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 of 2001 by around 17. After sharply dipping, sales increased remarkably in the third
quarter
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 of 2001 to around 84 followed by
the
Correct article usage
a
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 sharp decline of 40 in the fourth
quarter
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 of the same year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words quarter with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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