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Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problems does this cause ? What can be done about this?

#people #neighbours #cities
Communal disconnection is recently a problem that the
local
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 in large cities
faced
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 with. The main reason for
this
 issue is the poor sense of community, which can be solved
maily
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mainly
 by the local's
activies
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activities
 routine. The main cause for
this
 problem is
due to
 the poor sense of community.
This
 is because,
pursuit
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 of wealth and material
possession
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 of
human
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 nowadays are very large,
which
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 they all have an intention to emigrate to the
suburb
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 for living.
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, social anarchy
also
come
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 from
the
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air pollution, which made them
moved
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 away from the inner city. In consequence, settling for a
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long
 time
lead
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 them to get
along with
 the locality. Even they would shift towards basic
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such
 as organic products
,
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and, peaceful
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peaceful
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 atmosphere
at
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 many
village
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 where they live. These can lead to a direct impact on
high - quality
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 human resources in many companies that
effect
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on
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global economic integration as well
for instance
.
However
, a solution can be found in government action by
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focus
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 on enhancing facilities
also
 high levels of pollution and noise in large cities. If they can tackle those perfectly, the residents won't be tolerant and emigrate to another countryside.
As a result
, not only the government but
also
 each
inhabitants
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 should strike up a conversation with each
others
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 more and get
along with
 their
neighborhoods
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 in order to make a good circle of their relationships.
Therefore
, many do not know their neighbors in
larges
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large
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 cities
stens
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stems
stains
 from bad living standards
also
 as each of us altitude in life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Community spirit
  • Isolation
  • Surveillance
  • Safety and security
  • Vulnerability
  • Support networks
  • Local gatherings
  • Foster
  • Social media platforms
  • Neighbourhood watch
  • Emergency situations
  • Natural disasters
  • Shared resources
  • Crime rates
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