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Some people believe that professionals such as doctors and engineers should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that experts should
work
 in the
country
 where they trained,
while
 others believe they should
work
 in any region that they want to.
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this
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work
in
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anywhere they like to avoid
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To begin
 with, some believe that professionals must
work
in
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where they gain experience because it leads to the development of
country
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the country
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. Countries which full of potential
person
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 will help countries evolve in terms of medical care, economy and socializing.
In addition
, the government do not want these
people
 to evacuate to other countries since they
gave
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benefit
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the
country
.
However
, many say that working depends on your wish as someone might not like the social surroundings of the
country
 they have learned. Most citizens prefer to study abroad because of up-to-date disciplines,
while
 learning,
people
 may feel pressure since the surroundings influence
people
 to be active all the time.
For example
, a recent study has shown that when pupils who study abroad graduate, they go back to their origin since they cannot face
with
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this
 pressure.
Thus
, it is essential for pupils not to
work
 within
country
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 where it
gives
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 stress.
To sum up
, it is believed that citizens should
work
 in the
country
 they had learned for a reason of development in the
country
.
In contrast
, some agreed that it should be free to
work
in
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somewhere since they feel pressure and burnout in the region they learned and these reasons outweigh the former statement because when
people
 are stressed, they cannot do
work
 effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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