Nowadays a lot of offices employ open-space designs instead of separate rooms for work Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

More and more businesses are constructing
one
space
for their
employees
rather than dividing it into parts.
Although
having separate
rooms
can come as a huge advantage when it comes to individual
work
, I think,
benefits
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of having
one
space
outweigh the drawbacks because
team
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work
is considered to bring increased
work
efficiency. Private
space
for
employees
is advantageous as they can be more efficient when they have to accomplish projects not as a
team
but individually.
This
is because no
one
will be distracting them in their office compared to
one
hall where everyone is present.
As a result
, they are more likely to meet the deadlines.
In addition
, people usually feel more relaxed when they are on their own.
This
can be seen in formal occasions when people are obliged to sit in socially acceptable
position
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but once they arrive
their
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home or for a convenient
for
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them
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place, they are free to take a posture comfortable for them.
Therefore
, open areas in offices
seems
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to put unnecessary pressure on
employees
in
this
regard. 
However
, I think there are more benefits
on
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building
one
space
because companies can avoid extra expenditure on
construction
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the construction
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of the workplace and it leads to better collaboration among
colleagues
.
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Businessmen
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Businessman
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will not have to spend more finances on separating the
rooms
and in turn will be able to save some money, since building every wall adds to the price of construction.
In addition
, in order to separate private
space
for every worker company should have a bigger building in comparison to
one
big
space
.
This
is because
colleagues
can sit next to
one
another when everyone works together compared to private
rooms
where every worker should have a bigger
space
.  Another argument is that, as workers are always in
the
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one
place, they will be communicating more with each other compared to private offices where even if
one
has a question,
he\she
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she
is not likely to ask
the
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colleagues
since they may feel a burden to go out of their
rooms
. Once workers start to exchange ideas, they will start to
work
as a
team
and
team
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teamwork
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work
not only contributes to having closer
bond
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bonds
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among
colleagues
but
also
to the rise of
creativeness
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.
This
will result in better projects in turn increasing revenues of the corporation. In conclusion, even if having a private office is good for working individually it is
team
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teamwork
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work
which brings better
relationship
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relationships
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among
employees
and better income to the business.
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