Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. what problems does this cause? what can be done about?
Nowadays , a day lot of
people
don't communicate with their Use synonyms
neighbours
in big cities. the principal of Use synonyms
this
problem is that they are too busy in their personal life and working that don't have Linking Words
time
left to send their greet to each other, yet it can be solved by Use synonyms
reduce
the amount of work in each Change the form of the verb
reducing
peoples
life.
The root cause of Change noun form
person's
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neighbours
Change noun form
neighbours'
neighbour's
relationship
Fix the agreement mistake
relationships
at
large cities is the busy lifestyle of everyone as the industrialization of the world. it must be Change preposition
in
regconised
that Correct your spelling
recognised
recognized
people
lack Use synonyms
of
Remove the preposition
apply
communicate
even when living next to each other, either Replace the word
communication
due to
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everyone
busy lifestyle Change noun form
everyone's
and
the different Correct word choice
or
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time
of working and resting. Fix the agreement mistake
times
Consequently
, when in many dangerous situations or when we need help, Linking Words
neighbours
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is
the nearest person we can depend on when there is no family or friend Change the verb form
are
near by
but Correct your spelling
nearby
becausewe
don't know each other there will be no person we can lean on until family and friends come and Correct your spelling
because we
this
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some
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sometimes
time
can be dangerous for everyone Use synonyms
for example
, if there is a criminal break into your house, your neighbour could know easily and help you Linking Words
imediately
.
Correct your spelling
immediately
however
, a solution can be found in Linking Words
increase
the rate of socializing among Wrong verb form
increasing
people
living in the same neighbourhood social organizations should emphasize gathering Use synonyms
neighbours
to Use synonyms
greets
frequently by taking place in social events. Wrong verb form
greet
furthermore
, the security system can be focused on by the chief of the buildings who is responsible for residents of the buildings, to Linking Words
creat
safe policy facilities. it can rise that Correct your spelling
create
people
can believe one another fo to see them in frequent rapids.
Use synonyms
To sum up
, for communicating with strangers in their area Linking Words
people
can Use synonyms
creat
some mitigations which encourage them to meet and have Correct your spelling
create
time
with their Use synonyms
neighbours
.Use synonyms
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