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Map describes the changing of city in 1936 and 2007

Map describes the changing of city in 1936 and 2007
The given map portrays the development
in
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of
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 a city among city seven decades (from 1936 to 2007)
Overall
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, it is
clearly
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clear
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 that in the past there were
ares
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areas
 for nature and a few
building
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buildings
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,
while
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 in 2007 there were many entertainment places that
reduce
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reduced
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 green areas.
To begin
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 with, it was easy to find greenery places in 1936 since there were many trees,
river
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rivers
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, and
farm land
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farmland
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 next to government offices. The city
also
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 provided a cycle path which was located not too far from
flower
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the flower
a flower
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 shop. In the
center
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centre
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, there
were
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was
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post
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a post
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 office, candy shop, meat shops,
florist
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a florist
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,
bank
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a bank
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, and a library.
Mean
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Meanwhile
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while
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, in 2007, the number of trees
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was
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were reduce
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were reduced
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 from three to one and there
was
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were
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a
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apply
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residential areas changing the river. Another thing to add is the
farm land
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farmland
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 had
change
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changed
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 becoming
golf
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a golf
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 yard, and a museum
was build
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was built
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besides
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beside
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 it.
Moreover
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, supermarket had
expand
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expanded
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 their size
which
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apply
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take
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taking
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 over the candy and meat
shops
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shop
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 areas. Travel agent p had
change
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changed
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 the florist position.
There
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Some
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 were add some road opposite the museum.
In addition
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, in 2007, there was a big shopping centre around the markets.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reduce" was used 2 times.
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