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People learn in different ways. Some people learn by doing; some people learn by reading; others learn by listening to lectures or watching demonstrations. Which of these methods of learning is best for you? Use specific examples to support your choice.

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There is an argument that suggests that some
people
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 learn by doing, some learn by reading,
others
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and others
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 learn by listening or watching demonstrations. I completely agree with
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 viewpoint that
people
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 can learn
by
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 different ways, and
this
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 essay will outline the reasons why.
Firstly
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,
people
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 who learn by doing are often referred to as kinesthetic
learners
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, these individuals prefer to learn and understand by putting
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 hands into action rather than using
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traditional methods like reading and listening. Kinesthetic
learners
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 prefer activities that use
moviments
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movements
movement
, like sports, cycling, swimming,
handcrafts
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handicrafts
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 and others.
People
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 who learn by reading are known as visual
learners
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, they prefer to learn by reading, watching pictures, diagrams,
charts
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and charts
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.
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, There are
also
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the
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people
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 who learn by listening, they are known as auditory
learners
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 and prefer auditory material
such
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 as
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 podcasts,
audiobooks
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and audiobooks
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, they
also
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 attend lectures and engage in conversation. In my opinion, I’m a
kinesthesic
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kinesthetic
 learner because it’s easier for me to acquire new skills
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by practicing
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practicing
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practising
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,
getting
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and getting
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the
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my
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 hands dirty. When I was studying to get my driver’s license, the theoretical content seemed quite confusing,
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 when I started the practical classes, everything that I had learned before turned clear.
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, when I was in college, the same thing happened, what I had learned in college became clear when I started my internship. In
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 I firmly believe that I’m a kinesthetic learner since my tasks are more productive and effective when I’m actively engaged in hands-on activities.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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