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Some people think that young people should go to university to further their education while others think they should be encouraged to work as a car mechanic or builders etc. to serve society.discuss both views and give your opinion

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A group of
people
 believes that teenagers should go to
university
 to
further
 their study
life
while
the
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other groups of humans support they should be encouraged to work as
a
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machine mechanic or builders etc. to serve society. In
this
essay
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 both views are discussed. First of all, some
people
 think that
university
 is an essential way to improve and thrive young
people
's
life
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lives
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 and it provides them with fundamental information. Many businessmen, prominent writers, doctors and other vital
professions
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which
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who
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 played an enormous role in the
life
 of
population
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the population
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 in any country commenced
to
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their work
life
 with
high-quality
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a high-quality
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 education. At the same time, these
people
 can be provided
a
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lot of practical knowledge which can help them in the next parts of
life
.
For example
, the newspaper of Baku State
University
 wrote that 58 per cent of graduates in
this
university
 were known by the whole inhabitants,
it
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 was the
achieve
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 of BSU.
Secondly
, the other groups of
people
 believe that universities and
collagues
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colleagues
colleges
caused
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wasting
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waste
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time
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of time
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 and
young
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the young
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 generation cannot learn essential factors about
life
, jobs and
keys
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the keys
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 of specialionalism. Especially, society needs
people
 who know more practical details about their profession and they should control
unexcpected
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unexpected
 situations.
For example
,
Baku
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the Baku
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city journal
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City Journal
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 elaborates that the leaders of the five biggest
company
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companies
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of
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in
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 Azerbaijan did not study at any
university
, most of them came to the capital from
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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. In conclusion,
while
 studying can be needed by humans
for
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to
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knowing
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gain
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 basic knowledge about science and non-science fields,
but
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talent and practice can be more effective for
people
's
life
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lives
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. l strongly support
first
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the first
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 opinion,
however
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however,
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 it depends on personality and
people
 should take priority over themselves accurately.
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