Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news programs on television . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the digital era,
News
plays a vital role in
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lifestlye
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lifestyle
because it is a centralised
medium
so humans will get
the
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information
anywhere around the
world
.
News
more
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interconnected to
the
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everyone
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lifestyle but some
people
thinks
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knowing
information
through the
medium
it
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is a waste of time.In
this
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will discuss the benefits of learning the
news
.
Firstly
,
last
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decades most
people
reading
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news
in the newspaper
beause
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because
it
will help
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to know
current
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level of their society and it
is contain
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all the
information
like health,business more
entertaiment
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entertainment
blocks.Apart from that reading paper in the morning gives relaxation to their minds and reduce their stress.
For example
, During tsunami
people
knows the
whether
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weather
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information
through Television and papers.
Secondly
, Nowadays technology developing so we have to know what is happening to the outside
world
so reading
news
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the news
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will help to improve
people
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people's
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knowledge
vice
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and vice
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versa.All of us need to update so we need some
medium
know
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around the
world
so television
news
live helps to watch the incident directly .
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, During the covid 2021
people
follow
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the
news
channel
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channels
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to get rid of the
discease
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disease
and follow government
instruction
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instructions
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.
Finally
,
News
and the
medium
helps
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help
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to
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us to
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people
for learning and knowing
current
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status of the
world
and it has more like job
opportunties
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opportunities
and entertainment without
this
we could not live happily and peacefully so
people
update their knowledge through
news
medium
.
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  • informed
  • current events
  • platform
  • discussion
  • engagement
  • informed decisions
  • diversity
  • sense of community
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  • overwhelming
  • stressful
  • consumption
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