Some people think news has no connection to people’s lives, so it is a waste of time to read news in the newspaper and watch news programs on television . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In the digital era,

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plays a vital role in

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lifestyle

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anywhere around the

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like health,business more

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blocks.Apart from that reading paper in the morning gives relaxation to their minds and reduce their stress.

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around the

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status of the

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we could not live happily and peacefully so

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coherence cohesion

The essay lacks a clear structure with proper introduction and conclusion. The points are not presented logically, making it difficult to follow the argument.

task response

The response partially addresses the prompt but lacks depth and clarity. The ideas are not comprehensively developed, and the examples provided are not entirely relevant.

lexical resource

The essay lacks a varied and appropriate range of vocabulary. Some words are used incorrectly, and there is a lack of precision and clarity in expression.

grammatical range

There are multiple grammatical errors throughout the essay, including subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and sentence structure. There is also an issue with punctuation and word usage, impacting the clarity of the essay.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

238 words

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