The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main  features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the
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graph bar from 2010 have information about consumer good between two
contries
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countries
:
UK
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the UK
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and France.
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, both of the same
country
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countries
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are almost
in
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on
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the same level about computers,
therefore
it is completely different when the topic is cameras.  The biggest difference is about cameras, France bought cameras 150,000
although
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the UK
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passed by
this
number and got 350,000 that means,
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double. Another
point
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interesting point
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interisting
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interesting
it is about computers, these countries are close
from
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to
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each other, a little bit over only 30,000. Other subjects,
as
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such as
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car is
interisting
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interesting
as well, because it is the second topic with less difference. France
in
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is
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the top,
however
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however,
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it is just 50,000
of
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apply
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difference from
UK
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the UK
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(300,000) In general,
UK
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the UK
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is
in
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an
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advange
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advance
advantage
is
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in
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most
of
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the
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apply
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things, except
in
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perfume and computers.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words uk with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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