The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
In the
graph bar from 2010 have information about consumer good between two Change preposition
The
contries
: Correct your spelling
countries
UK
and France. Correct article usage
the UK
Overall
, both of the same country
are almost Change to a plural noun
countries
in
the same level about computers, Change preposition
on
therefore
it is completely different when the topic is cameras.
The biggest difference is about cameras, France bought cameras 150,000 although
UK
passed by Correct article usage
the UK
this
number and got 350,000 that means, the
double. Another Correct article usage
apply
point
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interesting point
interisting
it is about computers,
these countries are close Correct your spelling
interesting
from
each other, a little bit over only 30,000.
Other subjects, Change preposition
to
as
car is Correct quantifier usage
such as
interisting
as well, because it is the second topic with less difference.
France Correct your spelling
interesting
in
the top, Correct your spelling
is
however
it is just 50,000 Add the comma(s)
however,
of
difference from Change preposition
apply
UK
(300,000)
In general, Correct article usage
the UK
UK
is Correct article usage
the UK
in
Correct your spelling
an
advange
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advance
advantage
is
most Correct your spelling
in
of
Change preposition
apply
the
things, except Correct article usage
apply
in
perfume and computers.Change preposition
apply
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