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Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Some
people
 say
music
 can gather
people
 who
comes
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 from different ethnicities and cultural upbringings and age gaps together. In my opinion, I believe
this
 statement has a truth to it. Here, you will see the reasons why.
Music
 can be considered as a universal language as the tones and the sounds used by all the musicians around the
world
 are the same,
that
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and
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 only their naming of the codes is the only difference they have.
Therefore
, in order to learn and appreciate
music
, one should not have to have an understanding of another language.
Love
 for
music
 has no age limit. When you see singers or bands who were popular in the 80’s and
90’s
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90s
 performing today, to name a few, “
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 and
roses
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” and “Bryan Adams”, you see young
people
as well as
 the older generation
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present at concerts. In today’s
world
people
 have access to all the
music
that is
 available in the
world
 at clicks away because of the internet. Before
this
, back in the 90’s
music
has been
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 recorded and sold in cassettes and CDs.
Therefore
, songs from the past have been passed on to the present day. The language of
music
 is
love
 and it can break barriers and move past armies of soldiers to reach
people
 all around the
world
. The song called “Imagine” by John Lennon is a very popular one which
known
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 by many ethnic
people
, solely because it talks about
love
 and peace. Another example is the singer Michael Jackson who was adored by heaps of
people
 because he addressed social disparities in the
world
.
Love
 for Jackson was seen when the whole
world
 wept for his death in 2010. In conclusion,
music
 can bring
people
 with different traditions and ages together and it is a very efficient way to address
world
 problems like war, racism and climate change.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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