The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets. Summarize the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given pie charts
ilustrate
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illustrate
three types of meals
contained
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containing
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carbohydrate
, protein and fat levels. All data
presents
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is presented
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as
percentage
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a percentage
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.
Overall
, all three types of
diet
have more
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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than other
nutretions
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nutrients
and
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
and
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
for sport have more than half of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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.
In the
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The
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Average meal plan accounted
40
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for 40
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%
prorotion
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proportion
of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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and protein, both have
same
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the same
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percentages.
In
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This
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this
diet
has 20%
of
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apply
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fat which is the
less
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least
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include
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included
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neutrition
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nutrition
in the average meal plan.
However
,
healthy
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the healthy
a healthy
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meal has 50% of
carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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while
protein
accounted
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accounts
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30
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for 30
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% and fat
accounted
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accounts
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20
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for 20
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%. In healthy
diet
has half of
carbohydrate
.
In contrast
,
healthy
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a healthy
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sports meal plan has 60%
of
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apply
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carbohydrate
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carbohydrates
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, which is more
that
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than
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half
proportion
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a proportion
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of
total
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the total
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meal. In
this
diet
has 25% of
protien
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protein
and 15% of fat.
Average
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The average
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diet
and
Healthy
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a Healthy
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diet
contain
same
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the same
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amount of fat which is 20% and
average
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the average
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diet
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diet's
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carbohydrate
and
protien
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protein
level is
same
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the same
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words carbohydrate, diet with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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