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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the figures for
tourists
that
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who
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 visited a specific Caribbean
island
 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total
visitors
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number of visitors
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 followed an upward trend over the entire
period
.
While
tourists
that
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who
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 stayed on cruise ships saw a significant rise, those who stayed on the
island
 demonstrated a slight increase over the 8-year
period
. The total amount of foreign visitors that spent time on the
island
 exhibited 1.0
unit
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units
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 of individuals in 2010 and
then
 consistently increased to
around
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apply
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just below 3.0 in 2015. Before inclining more rapidly to 3.5,
finisihing
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finishing
 the
period
 at
this
 point, in 2017, it stayed relatively constant over a year. The number of
tourists
accodomated
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accommodated
 on cruise ships during their visits fluctuated between 0.25 and 0.5 between 2010 and 2013,
after
this
 fluctuation it
growed
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grew
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 steadily,replacing its counterpart as the highest-ranked category between 2015 and 2016, to 2.0
at the end
 of the
period
.
In contrast
, After a stable
period
 of around 0.75, the figures for
tourists
which
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who
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 stayed on
island
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the island
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 during their visits doubled its value and reached 1.5, and
then
 stayed at
this
 level in the next three years before hovering at the same level until the end.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, island, period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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