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Nowadays we are producing more and more rubbish. Why do you think this is happening? What can governments do to help reduce the amount of rubbish produced?

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Waste
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 is occupying most of living land for major parts of the world. It is believed that
waste
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 production is increasing on a daily basis.
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 essay will discuss the reasons behind
this
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 issue and suggest some possible solutions from the
government
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 to reduce its volume.
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 with, there are several reasons behind its increment. The first one is a lack of awareness among the individuals. Most of
citizens
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the citizens
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developing
countries
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such
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 as Pakistan, Iraq and India are not aware of the types of
waste
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.
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, people in
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countries
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 are not aware of recycling and reusable items.
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, they usually throw an item which can be re-used for their purpose. In order to improve
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, the
government
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 should be running an awareness campaign. There should be regular
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 events in a community park or mall where they teach techniques to reuse
waste
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 for different purposes.
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, there is no equipment for them to divide their
garbage
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 into different categories. To give an example, in developed
countries
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 namely USA and Canada, local people divide their
waste
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 into two different
waste
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 bins i.e. Recycle Bin and
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 Bin. These bins are
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 being provided by their
government
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.
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,
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 resources are not being provided to people in developing
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.
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 results in having all
garbage
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 thrown together where reusable items are scrapped as well. To reduce
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,
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government
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the government
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 can use some funds to distribute
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 equipment to its citizens with knowledge
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 how to use it.
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, they can arrange weekly
garbage
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 trucks to collect these different types of
waste
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.
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, lack of knowledge and resources are the two main reasons behind
waste
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 being produced in large quantities.
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, the
government
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 can run an alertness campaign and contribute some funds to their
waste
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 management system which includes teaching them to use two different kinds of
garbage
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 bins.
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 will help to reduce its production.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumerism
  • disposable culture
  • over-packaging
  • non-recyclable
  • public awareness
  • waste management
  • environmental impact
  • recycle
  • recycling facilities
  • waste separation
  • single-use products
  • infrastructure
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