The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and  make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the formation process of
salmon
in three different stages.
Overall
, we can see that they begin with
fry
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fish and finish with adult
salmon
.
Besides
, it takes nearly ten years for the life cycle of
salmon
Firstly
, big
salmon
will lay eggs in the upper
river
and those eggs turn into fries with a length of 3-8 cm. After that, small fish move to the lower
river
with fast flowing and they stay there for about 4 years.
Secondly
, when they leave the
river
for the first time, the length of
salmon
reaches between 12 to 15 cm, they will call smolt.
In addition
, they move to the open sea and continue to live in the sea for four or four and a half years.
At
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In
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the end, before leaving the sea and returning to the upper
river
, the
salmon
grow 70 to 76 cm in size
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salmon, river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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