The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called salmon.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and  make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the formation process of
salmon
in three different stages.
Overall
, we can see that they begin with
fry
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fish and finish with adult
salmon
.
Besides
, it takes nearly ten years for the life cycle of
salmon
Firstly
, big
salmon
will lay eggs in the upper
river
and those eggs turn into fries with a length of 3-8 cm. After that, small fish move to the lower
river
with fast flowing and they stay there for about 4 years.
Secondly
, when they leave the
river
for the first time, the length of
salmon
reaches between 12 to 15 cm, they will call smolt.
In addition
, they move to the open sea and continue to live in the sea for four or four and a half years.
At
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In
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the end, before leaving the sea and returning to the upper
river
, the
salmon
grow 70 to 76 cm in size
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Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.

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