You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some countries achieve international sports by building specialised facilities to train top athletes, instead of providing sports facilities that everyone can use. Do you think this is positive or negative development? Discuss both views and give your opinion. You should write at least 250 words.
Countries
nowdays
Correct the word
nowadays
wanted
to be in every race Wrong verb form
want
either
it is a Correct word choice
whether
coldwar
or a Correct your spelling
cold war
cold-war
Sport
race. For this
, they are inversting
in Correct your spelling
investing
best
of the technology and in Correct article usage
the best
best
of the best to win gold in Correct article usage
the best
Correct article usage
the olympics
olympics
. At first glance, it looks healthy but later it is a Change the capitalization
Olympics
disasterous
move for healthy Correct your spelling
disastrous
sports
.
Apex Players in all kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
sports
are treated as demigods with insane
fan following and Add an article
an insane
the insane
often
considered as a pride to our nations. Add a missing verb
are often
So
, Rephrase
apply
this
influence
the countries to pour their money Correct subject-verb agreement
influences
on
them and governmental organizations Change preposition
into
in
all levels provide Change preposition
at
best
Correct article usage
the best
faclilities
to them and for big Correct your spelling
facilities
sports
events they are given preference though they under performed
in two or three matches. Like, Sachin Tendulkar's son is given a top priority though he did not Correct your spelling
underperformed
performed
well in some matches in Change the verb form
perform
Indian
National Team. But, a top performer who consistently showed his Correct article usage
the Indian
caliber
was rejected and he didn't Change the spelling
calibre
undergone
formal training as he couldn't afford it.
Now, a question arises here: Being a top athlete's son would receive a special privilege or a consistent Change the verb form
undergo
perfomer
Correct your spelling
performer
is
given a ticketCorrect subject-verb agreement
be
.
It affects Change the punctuation
?
entire
Correct article usage
the entire
sports
environment there are many deserving candidates who are from remote parts of the country who are waiting for years for a chance. The government is failing to identify these individuals rather than prefering
elite players. It is Correct your spelling
preferring
a
Correct article usage
the
responsibilty
of the government to provide better facilities and should be Correct your spelling
responsibility
accesible
to all.
Some Countries are Correct your spelling
accessible
also
involving
in illegal activities like injecting drugs to the top players to perform well in Wrong verb form
involved
the
Correct article usage
apply
sport
events Change the noun form
sports
and
they Correct word choice
apply
knew
it is against the Wrong verb form
know
rule
but still it is prevalent. Some may even bribe the Fix the agreement mistake
rules
sport
Fix the agreement mistake
sports
officals
to allow them for competitions.
Giving Correct your spelling
officials
a
specialized training or treating some top athletes is not a problem as they deserve it but Correct article usage
apply
favoritisim
doesn't work always. The government should play a fair game in an international arena and if they play like Correct your spelling
favouritism
this
and
Correct word choice
apply
sport
persons would bring laurels to the nation which would be itched forever.Change the noun form
sports
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