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The maps below shows a plan of a city in 1950 and at the present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below shows a plan of a city in 1950 and at the present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two diagrams illustrate the changes in the town in 1950 and the present day.
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, the city has undergone a number of dramatic changes, the most important of which are the expansion of the housing
area
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, the office
area
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 and the development of amenities. In the north-west and north-east, almost no changes were made, except it saw the spread of accommodation
area
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,
while
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 the office
area
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 in the middle map witnessed a significant rise and surrounded government buildings. A dam was built in the southeast of the city, which established a lake which interrupted the housing
area
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. The government decided to upgrade the transportation, with two new major roads built in the northeast and southeast. To the west of the new dam, the bridge was constructed to allow movement between two banks of the lake and access major roads.
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, the airport
area
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 in the angle southern-east was widened catering to movable needs.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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