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The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the top ten counties for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates ten countries that generated and consumed the biggest amount of electric
power
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 in the year 2014.
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, it can be seen that there was a big difference in the data between the two biggest producers and consumers, which were China and America, and the rest of the listed states,
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 Korea was the country that had the lowest scores in both areas for
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 year. Germany could not provide the country's needs
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 and used more electric
power
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 than it fabricated. In 2014 the major manufacturer of electricity was China with 5,398
billion
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kWh
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, strictly followed by the United States with 4,099
billion
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kWh
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.
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, they were
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 the prime consumers, since they used almost all of their generated
power
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 with 5,322 and 3,866
billion
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kWh
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, respectively. Next in descending order were Russia, Japan, India, Canada, France, Brazil, Germany and the Republic of Korea. Korea was the country, which had the lowest numbers in both areas, from
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 top ten list with only 485.1
billion
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kWh
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 generated and 449.5 utilized in 2014. Over the period, Germany used 582.5
billion
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kWh
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 of electric
power
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,
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 the output was only 526.6.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words power, billion, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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