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The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.

The graph below shows the amount of goods transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002.
#amount #goods #uk
The line diagram illustrates the number of things transported in the United Kingdom between 1974 and 2002.
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 it is
undoubtfull
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doubtful
undoubtful
undoubtfully
 that
road's
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road
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 transportation accounts in tonnes have
huge
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a huge
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 advantage
amoung
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among
another
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 goods. It is undeniable that
Pipeline
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 which
is
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 have least requirements has an increase
approximately
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 15 million tonnes in 2002 beginning from 1974. Despite, them it is very noticeable that Rail and Water which
have
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 similar
amount
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amounts
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 in 1974, went
to
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the opposite ways of each other in 1978. When
water
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the water
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 trend increased sharply, rail's progress dramatically decreased.
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at
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 the
end
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 the gap between them
were
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 20 million
of
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tonnes. In conclusion, I argue that in
significant
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 amount of
year
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year,
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 the good's transportation
have
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 an incredible result. The fact that their results compare from start and to end gap was over 20 million except rail's advance
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • amount
  • transported
  • UK
  • increased
  • significantly
  • 28-year period
  • first decade
  • steady increase
  • significant jump
  • highest point
  • gradual decline
  • minor increase
  • dropped
  • similar level
  • goods
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