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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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This
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population’s
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the population’s
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 proportion aged 65
years
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 old and above from 1940 to 2040
regarding
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in
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 three different countries.
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,
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USA
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the USA
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 and
Sweden
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 have seen their percentage
increasing
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increase
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 over the
years
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similarly
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.
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, Japan had been decreasing but seen an escalation. The two lines illustrating
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USA
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the USA
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 and
Sweden
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 have been side to side most of the time. Indeed, the number of 65
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years’
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years
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 people grew considerably at a similar pace. In fact, in 2040, the predicted percentage is expected to reach 23% for both lands compared to 7% in 1940. By a slight difference, from 1940 to 2000,
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USA
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the USA
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has been
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 on top of the two other countries until1995 where
Sweden
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 got ahead of
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USA
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the USA
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. Japan for several
years
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 had a very low percentage. Undeniably, from 1940 to 1960, the proportion dropped from 5% to 3%.
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, following these
years
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,
this
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 portion has expanded in a drastic way
especially
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, especially
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from
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since
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 2020.
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, it is forecasted that by 2040, Japan’s population aged 65 and over will attain 27% overtaking
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USA
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the USA
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 and
Sweden
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, usa, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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