The graph below shows the rate of smoking per 1000 people in Someland from 1960 to 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information in the graph below.
The line graph compares the two genders in terms of their smoking rate per 1000
people
in Someland within the timespan of 40 years, commencing from 1960.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that there were significant changes in the number
of people
who smoked of the two genders shown on the graph. Another striking feature is that the number
of males saw a dramatic decrease over the 40-year period, while
the rate of females increased slightly.
In 1960, men preferred smoking, at 600 people
, whereas
only around 100 women smoked. Over the following 15 years, the number
of females who smoked reached 300 people
; however
, the figure for males dropped by 100 people
.
From 1975 to 1990, the smoking rate of the two genders fluctuated rapidly, hovering at around 400 people
and approximately 300 respectively. By 2000, the number
of men who smoked fell to only 350 people
, while
the figure for women saw a slight drop to 200 people
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