The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph compares store
closures
and
openings
in terms of the
number
of
shops
in one country within the timespan of 8 years, commencing from 2011.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that there were significant changes in both
closures
and
openings
over the shown period. Another notable point is that
although
the
number
of new
shops
exceeded that of closed
shops
in the first year, there were more stores that ceased to exist by the end of the period. In 2011, the respective numbers of
closures
and
openings
were around 6500
shops
and 8500
shops
. Over the following 3 years, the closed
shops
saw a slight fluctuation, at over 6500
shops
;
however
, the opened
shops
dramatically decreased to approximately 6000
shops
. By 2015, the store
closures
plummeted sharply, hitting its lowest point at around 1000
shops
,
while
there was a decrease of 2000
shops
in the
number
of new
shops
. From 2016 to 2018, the
closures
rose to around 5000
shops
,
then
oscillated steadily in the remaining periods,
while
the
number
of shop
openings
was lower, at 3000
shops
in 2018.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words closures, openings, number, shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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