Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to be shared (freely) Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Choosing to whether
sharing
Wrong verb form
share
information
Use synonyms
free
or not depends on many aspects. Replace the word
freely
That is
, it can be some tips about how to make a delicious cookie or about scientific research that can change the whole world. Linking Words
According to
that, many may say, and I agree, that some data are so important to be shared freely.
The main reason Linking Words
of
some Change preposition
for
people
interest Change noun form
people's
on
sharing knowledge for free is probably to help others not to experience what they had to achieve something. Change preposition
in
For instance
, a person who is successful in business can Linking Words
share
his advice with others, so they can use it to improve and Use synonyms
Linking Words
also
prevent failure Rephrase
apply
Change preposition
in
on
that field.
Needless to say, should extended countries Change preposition
in
did
not Unnecessary verb
apply
share
their solution for Corona vaccination, weak countries like Iran would never be able to control the pandemic itself. In that case, only when Use synonyms
do
others Unnecessary verb
apply
share
their Use synonyms
information
freely, the whole world can survive.
Use synonyms
However
, it is necessary to consider the situation before sharing Linking Words
instruction
without any payment. Fix the agreement mistake
instructions
For example
, Linking Words
considering
a business company which is holding special courses about financial. If one of its Wrong verb form
consider
employee
Change to a plural noun
employees
Use synonyms
share
the Change the verb form
shares
information
which is Use synonyms
reposing
just in those courses, that company might be bankrupt soon. For that matter, we cannot disclose data with high importance.
Correct your spelling
reposting
Besides
, that way, not only have everyone Linking Words
to
try hard to achieve what they desireFix the infinitive
apply
,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
they might realize some new Linking Words
information
.
In conclusion, it is better to think twice before Use synonyms
let
anyone have access to any instruction, Change the form of the verb
letting
specially
the delicate ones, to prevent any abuse of it.Replace the word
especially
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