The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
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The line chart compares four types of meat in terms of their popularity in one European country in the years 1979 and 2004. In general,
beef
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consumption was by far the highest at the beginning,
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, chicken became a leader taking dominance from
beef
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at the end
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of the period. It is
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worth noting that lamb and fish were insignificant throughout the period.
Initially
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, consuming
beef
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was about 220
grams
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per person per week. It decreased approximately to 180. In 1983
beef
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topped out at 240
grams
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. Afterwards, witnessed a dramatic fall until 2004.
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the line chart, eating chicken
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just under 150, and
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it took dominance surpassing
beef
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in 1989 reaching 200
grams
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per person. Eventually, after
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rise, it saw a high-record 250. In terms of lamb and fish, the former made up 150
grams
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of weekly intake in 1979
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fish, despite the mild fluctuations virtually stood steady in a whole given period. In 2004, the intake of
beef
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plunged markedly to 50
grams
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which is two times less than its initial point in 1989.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, grams with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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