The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line chart compares four types of meat in terms of their popularity in one European country in the years 1979 and 2004. In general,
beef
consumption was by far the highest at the beginning,
however
, chicken became a leader taking dominance from
beef
at the end
of the period. It is
also
worth noting that lamb and fish were insignificant throughout the period.
Initially
, consuming
beef
was about 220
grams
per person per week. It decreased approximately to 180. In 1983
beef
topped out at 240
grams
. Afterwards, witnessed a dramatic fall until 2004.
According to
the line chart, eating chicken
totaled
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just under 150, and
then
it took dominance surpassing
beef
in 1989 reaching 200
grams
per person. Eventually, after
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rise, it saw a high-record 250. In terms of lamb and fish, the former made up 150
grams
of weekly intake in 1979
whereas
fish, despite the mild fluctuations virtually stood steady in a whole given period. In 2004, the intake of
beef
plunged markedly to 50
grams
which is two times less than its initial point in 1989.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • fish
  • meat
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • gradual
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • steady
  • correlation
  • period
  • data
  • comparison
  • predominant
  • kilograms per capita
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • sustainability
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