Some people suggest that sport helps people learn about teamwork, but others say it can encourage to be too competitive. Discuss both views and give your own opinion?

#people #sport #teamwork

Sam

was looking forward to going out with his friends for the day, but his friends were busy at the

last

minute. But

Sam

seemed like he wasn't angry at his friends as he was a kind boy.

Sam

is a high school student born and raised in Busan, Korea.

Sam

lived with his grandma, who cared for

Sam

when he was a baby until he turned into a high school boy because her

mother

left him when he was born.

Sam

has asked her grandma about his

mother

many times; she told him that because of poverty, his

mother

couldn't afford his life, so his

mother

had to move to Seoul to find a job to care for

Sam

. Since

Sam

's grandma told him about his

mother

, he has decided that after he graduates high school, he will study college in Seoul and find his mom.

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task response

Ensure that your essay directly addresses the given topic and includes a clear and balanced discussion of both views.

coherence cohesion

Work on improving the organization of your essay to ensure a clear and logical flow of ideas, and include a proper introduction and conclusion.

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of vocabulary to express your ideas more precisely and cohesively.

grammatical range

Focus on sentence structure and grammar to further develop your range and accuracy of language use.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Grammar mistakes
 

1 paragraphs

147 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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