The charts below give information about the world's top three producers for four different dairy products (milk, cheese, butter, milk powder) in the year of 2012

The charts below give information about the world's top three producers for four different dairy products (milk, cheese, butter, milk powder) in the year of 2012
The bar chart illustrates the amount of
milk
, cheese, butter, and
milk
powder produced in different countries in 2012. In general, it is noticeable that the amount of
EU
produced is the highest,
while
the opposite was true for the United
State
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.
In addition
,
Milk
seems to be the most produced by all countries. In 2012, the figure for
EU produced
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milk
was 142,970, followed by India and the United
State
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which stood at 127,000 and 90,038 respectively.
Besides
that, the figure for Cheese produced by Brazil was only 700,
while
EU
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produced 7,120 tons
Cheese
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which
higher
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than that of the United St about 3,000. In terms of butter producers in 2012, India was produced 4,500 which higher
twice
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than those in
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the Eu
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Eu
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. The United
State
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was
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produced only 800 butters. Meanwhile, 1,200 was the figure for
Milk
Powder which was produced in China,
while
than
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that in
EU
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and New Zealand was 770 and 1,110 respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words milk, eu with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • dairy products
  • producers
  • milk
  • cheese
  • butter
  • milk powder
  • production volume
  • market leader
  • trend
  • anomaly
  • population
  • farming technology
  • export
  • ranking
  • data analysis
  • summary
  • chart comparison
  • top producers
  • domestic consumption
  • agricultural economy
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