You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion You should write at least 250 words.
Protests everywhere - even in
sports
, People are calling upon the government
to ban
some sports
which are harmful for
both humans and Change the preposition
to
environment
. But, Some Correct article usage
the environment
are considering
it as an Wrong verb form
consider
opression
of freedom. I will be briefing about these issues in forthcoming paragraphs.
Correct your spelling
oppression
expression
Sports
are often considered vital for both physical and mental well-being. However
, there are some sports
like activites
involving animals Correct your spelling
activities
are
causing menace. Correct pronoun usage
that are
For instance
, Bull
Fighting which
is the most popular sport in Correct pronoun usage
apply
southern
part of Add an article
the southern
europe
Change the capitalization
Europe
especially
Add the comma(s)
, especially
spain
. Change the capitalization
Spain
Bull
Fighting is an ancient sport where a man would be controlling a bull
using small spears. The bulls involved in these matches are constantly druged
Correct your spelling
drugged
drugs
which
Correct word choice
and
end
up Correct subject-verb agreement
ends
loosing
its mind to create a mess in the stages. Even a man trying to control the Replace the word
losing
bull
will eventually kill it using spears and it is a deadly match. Additionally
, Due to
overdosage
of drugs, Bulls will hit the audience as well. There are some reports suggesting that bulls are not even trained properly. For Correct article usage
the overdosage
such
kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
sports
, The government
can keep a
eye Change the article
an
over
Change preposition
on
it
and can even Correct pronoun usage
them
ban
those sports
which is involving
animals.
Wrong verb form
that involve
However
, There
are constant protests where people voice out not to Fix capitalization
there
ban
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
sports
as it will affect their culture. As it is a pratice
followed for ages, A group of people are opposing it and even Correct your spelling
practice
practise
regarding
it as an intervention of their freedom to Wrong verb form
regard
pratice
from the Correct your spelling
practice
government
. In some places of the world, They even consider it as a tradition or a festival.
To sum up
, Sports
is
always essential for developing our physical and Correct subject-verb agreement
are
pyschological
health. But, there should be Correct your spelling
psychological
set
of regulations Correct article usage
a set
should
be followed in allowing animal Correct pronoun usage
that should
sports
. In worst
cases, Correct article usage
the worst
government
can even Add an article
the government
ban
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
sports
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task response
Develop a more balanced discussion by presenting both sides of the argument in a clearer and more organized manner.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the organization of ideas, use more linking words, and ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea.
lexical resource
Enhance the variety and accuracy of vocabulary used, and pay attention to word choice and collocations.
grammatical range
Work on sentence structure, punctuation, and verb tense consistency for clearer and more accurate expression.
Fully explain your ideas
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:
- Paragraph 1 - Introduction
- Sentence 1 - Background statement
- Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
- Sentence 3 - Thesis
- Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
- Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
- Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
- Sentence 2 - Example
- Sentence 3 - Discussion
- Sentence 4 - Conclusion
- Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
- Sentence 1 - Summary
- Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
- Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation
Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.