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You have recently visited a building which is of historical importance and came to know that it's in bad condition. Write a letter to local newspaper office. Which building it is? What are the problems? What do you expect them to do?

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Dear ms Sema I am reader your newspaper who is since 2000.
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wride
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write
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apronlem
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 which is
old
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an old
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bulding
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building
 in our
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city
. I want to explain a very old and historical building which is Burc Halife. the building is so
dencrous
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dangerous
 for our local people and tourist.
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afroid
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afraid
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one day
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die
 there like Gula Halife.
Firstly
, the building is very old.
Therefore
, its colour changed and so polluted. Some walls of the building are very dangerous for children and visitors.
Secondly
, the building needs repair because our historic buildings are so important to us. İt is affect our tourism sector. A lot of people work in the sector. if a day, the building
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while
 do not come tourists.
To sum up
, your company can write the problems and the government can find a solution. I strongly believe that if your newspaper ride about
this
 problem, every citizen can hear it. kind regards.
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Adopt a more suitable writing tone for a formal letter to the local newspaper.
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