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Parents want to achieve balance between family and career but only a few manage to achieve it. What do you think is the reason? Discuss possible solutions and provide examples.

#parents #balance #career #reason
Global life nowadays
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 is not been easy for anyone,
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 when it
discuss
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 the topic
work
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of work
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 and career.
This
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meaning
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mean
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 a huge significance to many people. In
twenty
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first
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twenty-first
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century
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 a job and
carrer
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career
has
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have
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 a great
significant
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significance
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specially
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especially
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 to
women
.
Feminists
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 movements from tewnty century
enteraing
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entering
in
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twenty
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first
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century gave
to
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women
 many rights that now they can practice those rights
such
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could be
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getting
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divorce
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 and working, of course it depends
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 the country even
so
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though
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western
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contries
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countries
shows
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a
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progress
access
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of
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to
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women
 rights. Because of
this
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 movements
the
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sociaty
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society
 can feel it even today, many articles
has
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have
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said
the
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that
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women
 are postponing
to have
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having
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 a
baby
 or a family and
the
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apply
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work are predominantly the big choice of their lives. They achieve
first
 to have a career
instead
to have
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of having
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 a
baby
 or a family,
this
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apply
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both two are
in
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on
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the
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a
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 fine line.
Consequently
beacause
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because
 of
women
's choice men
is
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are
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 having a family late.
Couple
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Couples
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nowadays have to
do
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have
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 a truthful conversation and debate
when
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about when
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 they could have
a children
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children
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 and start a family,
also
 because
women
 can have a
baby
 until a certain age. So, If a pear
want
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wants
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 to give
a
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birth to a
baby
 and both
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of them
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them
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they
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 are older they have to think
If
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about If
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enter
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entering
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to
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into
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 a relationship with a person that
do
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does
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 not want
have
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to have
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 a child
If
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It is a good choice.
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 of
this
, for parents that want
achieve
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to achieve
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 a balance between family and career
first
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 of all, they have to choose one of them and concentrate
energy
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their energy
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 for a couple of years in
this
 phase of
live
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life
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. After that, they do not
need
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need to
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 choose something between them, just can focus more
in
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on
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 one than
in
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on
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 the other.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • time management
  • support systems
  • childcare
  • traditional gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • financial stability
  • flexible working hours
  • remote work options
  • burnout
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