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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002 Write at least 150 words

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five countries in 2002 Write at least 150 words
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The table provides the consumption percentage of three different items by
people
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 in five countries in 2002.
Overall
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,
people
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 in all the countries spent a lot on
food
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/drinks/
tobacco
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, and less on
leisure
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/
education
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.
To begin
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 with,
people
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 in Turkey spent the biggest amount on
food
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/drinks/
tobacco
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. It was 32.14%. followed by clothes and footwear at 6.63% and for
leisure
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/
education
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, Turkish only spent 4.35% In the second place, the Irish spent 28.91% on
food
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/drinks/
tobacco
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, 6.43% on clothing/footwear, and only 2.21% on
leisure
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/
education
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.
Finally
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,
people
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 in Spain, Italy, and Swedes spend less than 20% on
food
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/drink/
tobacco
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, consume less than 10% on clothes/foot gear, and spend less than 4% on
leisure
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/
education
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,
in addition
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people
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 in Sweden spending 0.2% on
leisure
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/
education
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 than the Italian.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food, tobacco, leisure, education with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumer spending
  • items
  • countries
  • comparison
  • overview
  • table
  • data
  • information
  • proportion
  • percentage
  • figures
  • categories
  • expenditure
  • purchases
  • spending habits
  • trends
  • average
  • highest
  • lowest
  • variation
  • pattern
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