Some people think that wild animals should not be kept in zoos. Athers believes that there are good reasons for having zoos. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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One
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of the most controversial issues today relates to
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thinking that wild
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should not be kept in
zoos
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,
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some
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tend towards the viewpoint that should keep the wild
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in
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,others support the idea should not be kept in
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.In
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essay, I am going examine both points of view and produce my own opinion. On
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side of the argument, there are
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who argue that
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wild
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in
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zoos
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.The main reason for believing
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is that wild
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do not have the survival ability nowadays.To be more specific,
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stole natural places from
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,cut off the forest and made a lot of trash,wild
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are easy to be attacked by cars or
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.
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,
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find lots of plastic bags in the animal's bodies, which causes the animal's deaths.It is
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possible to say that some
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think that when
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are valuable,they will catch the wild
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just to sell a good price.
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good illustration of
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is many elephants have been killed just because of their tooth,so keeping wild
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in
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is the way to protect them.
On the other hand
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,the opposite argument is that
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should not keep wild
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in
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.For
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thing,
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think that wild
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should be free not for being a product.To illustrate,
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train dolphins to make
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fun and earn money,but dolphins should live in the sea with freedom.For another,the fact that to protect wild
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is all
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's responsibility,not just to keep them in
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,we should make
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become common sense
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when all
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are educated to protect wild
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,
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can live with
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together. In conclusion,
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are good, nowadays
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are not innocent anymore,and
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should not use
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to earn money.I personally prefer wild
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should not be kept in
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.

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task response
Task Achievement: The response covers both sides of the argument and provides a personal opinion. However, the examples could be more specific and detailed to enhance the argument.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and Cohesion: The logical structure is mostly clear, and there is a presence of introduction and conclusion. However, the linking of ideas and examples could be improved for better coherence.
lexical resource
Lexical Resource: The use of vocabulary is fairly good, but there is room for improvement in using more varied and nuanced vocabulary to express ideas more precisely.
grammatical range
Grammatical Range: The essay demonstrates reasonably accurate use of grammar structures. However, there are some errors in sentence structure and tense usage that need improvement.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infringes on
  • natural habitat
  • behavior
  • confined spaces
  • physical and psychological stress
  • life expectancy
  • distress
  • pacing
  • over-grooming
  • self-mutilation
  • artificial environment
  • critical role
  • education
  • conservation
  • research
  • breeding programs
  • endangered species
  • extinction
  • scientific research
  • animal health
  • sanctuary-like environments
  • simulate
  • educational
  • conservational advantages
  • animal welfare
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