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You are planning to take a vacation. Write a letter to a friend : . Describe the vacation spot you have choose .explain how you plan to spend time there .Invite your friend to join on your vacation.

#vacation #friend #spot #plan #time
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Hello Rohit, How's it going? Hope you're doing well. I'm writing
this
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 letter because I am planning to go somewhere to spend
holidays
Correct article usage
the holidays
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 . You know very well, mostly I like hilly areas .One thing is that
,
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snow is coming, so so
decide
Wrong verb form
decided
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 to go
Montreal
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to Montreal
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 , where we can enjoy everything. We will stay in a Park Hotel because they provide all types of facilities
as well as
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 it is
luxuary
Correct your spelling
luxury
Moreover
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, there are numerous places where we can go and enjoy together .
For example
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: temples and parks and we can go
in
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to
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 restaurants to eat special things .We will stay there for three days I invite you to join
with
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apply
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me , because I know you
also
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 like to
travelling
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travel
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 a lot and
a
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apply
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want to explore new places. I will be waiting for your response
,
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so that I can book tickets . Lots of love, Manpreet
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task response
The letter does not fully respond to all components of the task. It lacks detailed descriptions of the vacation spot and how the time will be spent there.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure and organization of ideas are not consistent throughout the letter. Work on transitioning between sentences and paragraphs for better coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and appropriate words to express ideas clearly and accurately.
grammatical range
The letter contains various grammatical errors. Try to use a wider range of sentence structures and grammatical forms. Review the use of tenses, articles, and punctuation.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking scenery
  • cultural landmarks
  • itinerary
  • accommodations
  • excursions
  • gastronomic delights
  • leisure activities
  • unwind and relax
  • off the beaten track
  • once-in-a-lifetime experience
  • picturesque
  • explore
  • local cuisine
  • adventure
  • bonding
  • create memories
  • companionship
  • escapade
  • serenity
  • revitalize
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