Children should go school or teach at home. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.

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Since past schooling is the one and only method of
education
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. But now it seems to
getting
Verb problem
be

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change
Wrong verb form
changing

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as teaching at
home
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is increasing
popularity
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in popularity

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among
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in

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present society. Schooling
is facilitate
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is facilitated
is facilitating

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to improve a plethora of life
skills
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while
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parents are able to establish a proper secure environment in
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home base
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home-based

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education
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.
However
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, I strongly believe that
school
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education
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is most suitable for students as it opens the
variouse oppertunities
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various opportunities

The words variouse oppertunities seem to be misspelled. Consider replacing them.

to interact with
human
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humans

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.
Firstly
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, schools are following a significant content and it was made by educational consultants
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apply
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apply

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after
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concerning
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apply
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apply

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the
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age appropriate
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age-appropriate

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activities and cognitive level.
Therefore
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, it seems very smooth running throughout the lessons and no extra
skills
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are required to grab the essential knowledge.
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School
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The school

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environment facilitates students to move with not only peer groups but
also
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with academic and
non academic
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non-academic

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staffs
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staff

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.
By interacting
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Interacting

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with a number of people, directly
help
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helps

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to enhance
skills
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such
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as sharing, caring,
and
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apply

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decision making etc.
For instance
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, my daughter developed the skill of working with peers, only after entered to the
school
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. Until
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that,
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Add a comma
that,

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that
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then
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she was
a
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an

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isolated girl with less
active
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activity

The word active doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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.
Eventhough
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Even

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,
society
Correct word choice
though society

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becomes
Wrong verb form
has become

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more sophisticated and
due to
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that reason the security level
become
Verb problem
has

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decreased gradually. No one can
responsible
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be responsible

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for
others
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others'
other's

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lives as traumas, accidents and
violences
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violence
acts of violence
outbreaks of violence

It appears that violences is an uncountable noun and should not be made plural. Consider changing the noun.

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are
getiing
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getting

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increased. Some parents may believe that the schools are
also
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not
consider
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considerate

The word consider doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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of the protection of children.
Therefore
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in
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home
Correct article usage
the home

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environment parents are able to take measures to uplift the protection
while
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

teaching at
home
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. But the problem is youngers
are having
Wrong verb form
have

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limited exposure to society and it seems less effective in terms of
education
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. In Sri
lanka
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Lanka

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, there are a number of crimes and
violences
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violence
acts of violence
outbreaks of violence

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are recorded daily and most of them
surrounded
Verb problem
are

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in schools.
To sum up
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,
eventhough
Correct your spelling
even though

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there is a
tend
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tendency

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of
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to

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home
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education
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

as well as
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school
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

education
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

. I personally believe that
shool based
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school-based

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education
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is most effective as it
facilitate
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facilitates

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children to
sharp
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sharpen

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their
skills
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parelalley
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parallel

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with
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to

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education
Use synonyms

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.
Therefore
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, my opinion is
school
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education
Use synonyms

It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

is most effective and suitable for children.

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Task Response
Focus on developing a clear, well-structured argument that addresses all aspects of the prompt. Make sure to support your points with relevant examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas more coherently within paragraphs and between paragraphs. Ensure that your introduction and conclusion effectively frame your argument.
Lexical Resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express ideas more precisely. Use appropriate academic language and avoid repetitive words and phrases.
Grammatical Range
Pay attention to sentence structure, punctuation, and grammatical accuracy. Vary sentence structures and use complex sentences to demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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