Children should go school or teach at home. Discuss both aspects and give your opinion.
Since past schooling is the one and only method of
education
. But now it seems to Use synonyms
getting
Verb problem
be
change
as teaching at Wrong verb form
changing
home
is increasing Use synonyms
popularity
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in popularity
among
present society. Schooling Change preposition
in
is facilitate
to improve a plethora of life Change the verb form
is facilitated
is facilitating
skills
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while
parents are able to establish a proper secure environment in Linking Words
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home base
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home-based
education
. Use synonyms
However
, I strongly believe that Linking Words
school
Use synonyms
education
is most suitable for students as it opens the Use synonyms
variouse oppertunities
to interact with Correct your spelling
various opportunities
human
.
Fix the agreement mistake
humans
Firstly
, schools are following a significant content and it was made by educational consultants Linking Words
Change preposition
apply
after
concerning Change preposition
apply
Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
age appropriate
activities and cognitive level. Add a hyphen
age-appropriate
Therefore
, it seems very smooth running throughout the lessons and no extra Linking Words
skills
are required to grab the essential knowledge. Use synonyms
Use synonyms
School
environment facilitates students to move with not only peer groups but Correct article usage
The school
also
with academic and Linking Words
non academic
Add a hyphen
non-academic
staffs
. Fix the agreement mistake
staff
By interacting
with a number of people, directly Change preposition
Interacting
help
to enhance Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
skills
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such
as sharing, caring, Linking Words
and
decision making etc. Correct word choice
apply
For instance
, my daughter developed the skill of working with peers, only after entered to the Linking Words
school
. Until Use synonyms
Add a comma
that,
that
she was Correct your spelling
then
a
isolated girl with less Change the article
an
active
.
Replace the word
activity
Eventhough
, Correct your spelling
Even
society
Correct word choice
though society
becomes
more sophisticated and Wrong verb form
has become
due to
that reason the security level Linking Words
become
decreased gradually. No one can Verb problem
has
responsible
for Add a missing verb
be responsible
others
lives as traumas, accidents and Change noun form
others'
other's
violences
are Change the wording
violence
acts of violence
outbreaks of violence
getiing
increased. Some parents may believe that the schools are Correct your spelling
getting
also
not Linking Words
consider
of the protection of children. Replace the word
considerate
Therefore
in Linking Words
Use synonyms
home
environment parents are able to take measures to uplift the protection Correct article usage
the home
while
teaching at Linking Words
home
. But the problem is youngers Use synonyms
are having
limited exposure to society and it seems less effective in terms of Wrong verb form
have
education
. In Sri Use synonyms
lanka
, there are a number of crimes and Change the capitalization
Lanka
violences
are recorded daily and most of them Change the wording
violence
acts of violence
outbreaks of violence
surrounded
in schools.
Verb problem
are
To sum up
, Linking Words
eventhough
there is a Correct your spelling
even though
tend
Replace the word
tendency
of
Change preposition
to
home
Use synonyms
education
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as well as
Linking Words
school
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education
. I personally believe that Use synonyms
shool based
Correct your spelling
school-based
education
is most effective as it Use synonyms
facilitate
children to Change the verb form
facilitates
sharp
their Replace the word
sharpen
skills
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parelalley
Correct your spelling
parallel
with
Change preposition
to
education
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, my opinion is Linking Words
school
Use synonyms
education
is most effective and suitable for children.Use synonyms
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