The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.

The bar chart illustrates the proportion of people who consumed five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the

UK over 8 years, which is from 2001 to 2008.
The graph shows the distribution of
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five portions of fruits and vegetables a day in England for the past eight
years
, from 2001 to 2008.
Overall
women, who
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to
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five
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of mentioned healthy food
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more
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men
and
children
all the reporting period. And for all the categories, the number of people who
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the intake portion has
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increase
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from the reporting
year
2001 to the max of 2006 and
then
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in the
last
two
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consecutive
years
. In all three groups, women
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the
most
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population. It had just above 20 per
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cent
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at the beginning of
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of reporting
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and gradually increased to the peak of 35 per
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cent
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, 6
years
later.
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, the
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population
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the population
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went down back to 30 per
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in the
year
of
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2008. The trend of
children
and
men
is similar to women.
However
, when comparing
between
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children
and
men
, the difference between these two genders kept
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10 per cent for the beginning six reporting
years
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maximum
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year
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of
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2006 for both
children
and
men
, the gap between these two
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of gender reduced and with very small
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difference
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, men, children, year with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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