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To meet the growing need for food to support an increasing population, a country should make use of edible insects as a food source. However, some people believe that insects are not only unhealthy but harvesting them will also negatively affect nature. What are the benefits and drawbacks of eating insects? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The Shortage of
food
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 supply across the globe
causing
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 people to ponder over their heads to look for other alternatives , especially
insects
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. But, many oppose
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 view as
insects
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 affect both the environment and humans. There are many advantages and disadvantages of eating an insect. As
insects
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 are the smallest creatures among all, it is very easy to hunt and harvest them and it requires less effect on feeding them.
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, Cows usually require lavish grasslands to yield better products like milk and meat. But,
insects
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 don't require a great diet to produce better
food
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 products and the human effect involved is considerably low compared to animals.
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, Eating
insects
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 can
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 come with healthier benefits like plenty of nutrients available in
insects
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 like proteins, vitamins and low fat.
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 makes a wider audience adopt
insects
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 as a good replacement for
food
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.
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,
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 comes with numerous cons.
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, it is not healthy to eat
insects
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 especially some exotic
insects
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 that contain some poisons. The
food
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 made from these
insects
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 can affect our
body
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bodies
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 and can cause a plethora of diseases. There is an argument that it will affect other living beings as well.
Insects
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 are considered
as
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the lowest of the animal
food
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 chain. Most of the reptiles and birds rely on them as a primary
food
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 source. Even humans get honey from bees which is focal for both - as a medicine and
food
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. Some microbes even need
insects
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 to survive.
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 after going through all these pros and cons, it is essential for
population
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the population
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 to choose whether we really need
insects
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 as a
food
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 product as it adversely affects the complete circle of other species including humans.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • food scarcity
  • edible insects
  • nutritional benefits
  • cultural barriers
  • psychological barriers
  • mainstream food source
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • environmentally sustainable
  • economic benefits
  • local farmers
  • health safety
  • allergies
  • pesticides
  • pollutants
  • ecosystems
  • biodiversity
  • regulations
  • hygiene
  • unforeseen consequences
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