The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030

The graph below gives information from a 2008 report about consumption of energy in the USA since 1980 with projections until 2030
The
line
chart
provides information about
consumption
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the consumption
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of
energy
in the USA over a
50-year-period
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50-year period
, between 1980 and 2030.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the data for nuclear and coal experience
gradual
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decrese
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decrease
,
while
other types are predicted to have some fluctuations.
Besides
that, it is evident that petrol and oil showed the highest use of
energy
in the entire period. Having a detailed look at the
line
chart
, it is visible that nuclear,
hydropower
, solar and
wind
had started from the same point which is almost 4
uadrillion
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quadrillion
units
in 1980.
However
, nuclear
energy
increased reaching around 9
uadrillion
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quadrillion
units
and
maintain
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maintaining
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the highest position among
hydropower
and solar/
wind
energy
in 2030. It is crystal clear that at the beginning
hydropower
was
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outraced solar/
wind
in 1995,
then
witnessed
decline
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the decline
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and in 2005 increased to the same level as solar/
wind
over a 10-year-period,
finnaly
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finally
solar/
wind
outraced
hydropower
by almost 2
uadrillion
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quadrillion
units
during the
remain
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remaining
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period.
According to
the
line
chart
, it is noticeable that coal and natural gas were 16 and 20
intially
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initially
and
then
anticipated for coal to rise almost by 12
uadrillion
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quadrillion
units
and exceed natural gas in 2020. As is presented in the
line
chart
, it is
undenible
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undeniable
that petrol and oil were the highest
energy
consumers
being
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with 35
uadrillion
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quadrillion
units
and reaching 42
uadrillion
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quadrillion
units
in 2005 and witnessed
steady
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a steady
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increase from 2005 to 2020 and
forecated
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forecasted
to increase throughout the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words line, chart, energy, hydropower, wind, uadrillion, units with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Energy consumption
  • Renewable resources
  • Non-renewable resources
  • Fossil fuels
  • Nuclear power
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Solar energy
  • Wind energy
  • Biomass
  • Consumption patterns
  • Technological advancements
  • Energy efficiency
  • Sustainable development
  • Carbon footprint
  • Energy policy
  • Projections
  • Decade
  • Significant shifts
  • Economic factors
  • Environmental impact
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