The chart below shows the change in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.

The chart below shows the change in three different areas of crime in Machester city centre from 2003-2012.
the chart gives us information about the changes in the three places of three
type
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types
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of
crimes
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crime
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burglary ,car theft and robbery in
machester
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city center between 2003 and 2012
.
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Overall
overall
it can be seen that the rate of car theft
was
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increase
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however
,for other
crims
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decrease or remain unchanged . refers to burglary
crime
that stood at around 3300 in 2003 which was the highest number of commit
crime
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crimes
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over the period ,
then
there was
dramatic
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decline in the amount of
crime
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crimes
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by 1000 in 2008 ,
over
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and over
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the next 4 years , the number of
crime
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rose steadily
untill
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until
2012 . regards to other crimes
such
as car theft ,the amount of
crime
in 2007 saw
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gradual rise during the period 2008 to 2012 .
moreover
the level of robbery
was
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steady climb
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in 2005 ,
then
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dropped
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slowly in the number it
crime
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,for the
next
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following years the
totall
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total
of amount
crime
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was reamin
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remained
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unchanged .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words crime with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.

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  • crime rate
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decrease
  • increase
  • stable
  • significant
  • socio-economic factors
  • policing efforts
  • legislation
  • public perception
  • safety
  • correlation
  • measures
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