Under British and Australian laws a jury in a criminal case has no access to information about the defendant's past criminal record. This protects the person who is being accused of the crime. Some lawyers have suggested that this practice should be changed and that a jury should be given all the past facts before they reach their decision about the case. Do you agree or disagree

It is believed that a
jury
ought to be provided
all
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the
information
about the past facts of
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the offender
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.
While
this
may work to a certain extent, I would argue that
this
issue
also
has dark sides. On the one hand, the idea
of
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all
the
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past criminal
record
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records
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should
be refer
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to
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is justifiable. When all data is presented to the
jury
, they will calculate and consider carefully before making a decision. Provided with all the
information
, the trial panel will have a more objective view to reach the final decision.
For instance
, Nguyen Van An was unfairly convicted because
thw
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the
judge judged the case subjectively, leading to An being unjustly
imprisioned
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imprisoned
for 8
years
and being exonerated on April 10
last
year,
althought
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although
he was absolved ,
this
was
also
a significant disadvantage for him as he had to endure 8
years
in prison.
As a result
, it seems
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that the
jury
should be given all the past facts of the criminal.
On the other hand
, in my point of view, to protect
criminals
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criminals'
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interests, providing criminal
record
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records
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to a judge is not advisable. The
retionale
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rationale
is that if the trial panel is not truthful, the law-breaker may be wrongfully convicted. When all
information
is revealed, the opposing side can bribe a
jury
with offers of money to get the data, thereby finding reasons to refute that
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, which will be extremely detrimental for the lawyer, who defends
criminal
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the criminal
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. Vietnam perfectly exemplifies
this
siuation
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situation
, on November 1, six
years
ago, a woman suffered domestic violence from her husband and sued him, after knowing the
information
brought to the
jury
, he corrupted the adjudicator and the wife was unjustly convicted, it was not until 5
years
later that she was exonerated and the court, lawyer and husband
as well as
those involved received legal punishment.
Therefore
, the
jury
should not be offered the criminal’s past. In conclusion,
while
others argue that the tribunal should be provided
all
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record
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records
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of the law-breaker's facts to reach a fair decision, I believe that all
information
ought to be kept confidential so that criminals are not wrongfully convicted.
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