In many places, new homes are needed but the only space available for building them is in the country side. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this
Over the years, the population of humans is increasing so
people
require more homes
to live. Some individuals believe that the government should use the countryside
to build new houses while
others are against this
view and they defend keeping the countryside
. I fully agree with group two for some reasons.
To begin
with, it is true that people
need some places to live and in overpopulation cities
residents require extra Add a comma
cities,
accomodations
. Correct your spelling
accommodations
accommodation
Also
, making houses close together is very dangerous and causes collapse
of all structures that are not safe for individuals. Correct article usage
the collapse
For example
, in one of the cities in India with a high population, people
have to make lots of slums in order to have a hooch. Thus
, the government decided to expand the city by making new homes
in the countryside
.
On the other hand
, some individuals and I have different ideas. one of the crucial places in each nation is the countryside
. In addition
, there are some pupils that
want to live in a rural because they need to have a peaceful life. Correct pronoun usage
who
Furthermore
, if the government change rural areas and turns them into the city they destroy the biggest attraction of their country and also
one of the important animal's habitats. Finally
, there are some humans that would like to go to the countryside
as a holiday accommodation and are far away from the traffic, skyscrapers, pollution and so on. Hence
, society should use different methods to make new homes
.
In conclusion, Although
people
need new homes
, destroying the countryside
is not a reasonable remedy because the rural areas are part of the global and must be protected.Submitted by www.marzieh.eidi on
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