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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, the modern way of living has a specific impact on the environment and causes many issues that have to be solved.
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, the priority is in question, should we consider the loss of particular species of flora and fauna as the main problem or there are more significant issues? In my opinion, both sides are closely connected to each other, but the first view is more critical.
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 with, an important part of the environment belongs to different kinds of plants and animals, the food chain depends on a variety of species and the extinction of a kind may impact others.
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, if the rabbits become extinct, dogs will have trouble for haunting so they have to change their meals to other kinds that may be another species’ prey.
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, some argue that there are more considerable environmental circumstances that affect human life,
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 as air pollution. These people’s view considers human health on top of any other issue,
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, they think that it is better to spend money and time to solve these kinds of problems rather than trying to rescue flora and fauna.
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 human health is important, the earth is a home for all and mankind is responsible for most of
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 planet’s issues. I think every environmental issue is connected to another, if we do not take action to solve the deforestation problem and loss of plants, the fire that may be caused by
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 will increase pollution.
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, the extinction of species may impact human foods or will bring wild animals to the urban area in search of food. In conclusion,
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 there are many significant problems, saving animals and plants' lives will predict many following troubles, and they play a critical role in the ecosystem.
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Support your own opinion with stronger and more specific examples. Use relevant and specific statistics or studies to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the essay has a clear and logical progression of ideas. Use cohesive devices to connect and organize your ideas more effectively.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to include a wider variety of words and expressions. Aim for more precise and specific vocabulary related to environmental issues.
grammatical range
Work on using a wider variety of complex sentence structures and pay attention to subject-verb agreement and proper punctuation.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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