The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

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The pie chart illustrates the portion of three

nutrients

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in normal meals of people in USA. The reported

nutrients

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are

sodium

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, saturated

fats

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and added sugars, all of which have bad effects on

body

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if consumed in high

amount

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Overall

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breakfast

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and

snacks

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contain amounts of

sodium

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In addition

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breakfast

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contains these unhealthy

nutrients

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the least. Dinner has the largest share in

sodium

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and saturated

fats

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whereas

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snacks

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have the biggest portion in added sugar. For

sodium

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and saturated

fats

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, dinner contains these

nutrients

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the most respectively at 43 and 37 per

cent

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Furthermore

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breakfast

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has the least share in both of the

nutrients

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at 14 per

cent

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for

sodium

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and 16 per

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for saturated

fats

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Additionally

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, for

sodium

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, there is one more meal that has the least share which is

snacks

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. Among all the reported meals,

snacks

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have the most portion of added sugar at 42 per

cent

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whilst

breakfast

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has the least amount of added sugar, reported as 16 per

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words nutrients, sodium, fats, breakfast, snacks, cent with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

164 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Nutrients
Unhealthy
Daily intake
Percentage
Carbohydrates
Fats
Proteins
Meals
Balanced diet
Consumption
Excess
Health implications
Obesity
Diabetes
Heart disease
Convenience foods
Fast foods
Socioeconomic factors
Lifestyle choices
Healthy eating habits
Dietary recommendations

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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

In some countries, as cities grow, more money is spent on the urban transport system and little is spent on the rural ones. What are the problems creating it? What are the solutions to these problems?

Many people are doing their shopping on the internet nowadays. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of shopping online.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disanvantages of giving children this message?

Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars. Why is this happening? Is it a positive or negative development?

Nowadays artificial intelligence is being used to drive cars.  Why is this happening?   Is it a positive or negative development?