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Nowadays some individuals behave in an anti-society way, such as committing a crime. In general, it is the society to blame. What causes the anti-social behaviors of individuals? Who should be responsible for dealing with it?

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Introduction
The importance of
awarence
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awareness
 about
anti social
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anti-social
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 behaviors which was always debatable has now become
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controversial
 with many people
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claiming
climbing
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benefecial
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beneficial
while
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 others reject
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 notion.The
substansial
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substantial
infuluence
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influence
 of
this
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 trend has
sparket
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sparked
conterversy
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controversy
 over the
potintial
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potential
 impact in recent years.
This
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elobrate
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elaborate
the
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causes
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 of
anti social
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anti-social
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behaviors
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behaviours
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as well as
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 the main people who should
responsible
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be responsible
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 for dealing with
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this
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these
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causes
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Body paragraph 1
Analyzing the statement and
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explain
explaining
explains
further
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 the first and
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foremost
forcemeat
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causes
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cause
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 behind
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 is lack of
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awareness
.
Another striking
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Another striking cause
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causes
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 behind
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soiety
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societal
relationship
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relationships
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.If individuals have good members
suround
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surrounding
 them with perfect
featuers
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features
exacitly
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they
 do not do
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anything
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 wrong .
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addition
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 community must control our
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realistic
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Body paragraph 2
As well as
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immitatiom
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imitation
 plays an
essentiol
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essential
 part
to develop
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causes
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missbehaver
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misbehaviour
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Body paragraph 3
Proprimg ahead ,the main
responseble
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responsible
 people dealing with
this
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 situation is parents. Family
members
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members are
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 responsible for what
thier
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their
 children
did
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do
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 even right or wrong
behave
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apply
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.
Now a days
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Nowadays
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 social media
affect
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affects
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more
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us more
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 and more to our thinking .It
diricte
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directed
 to
transmiting
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transmitting
 bad knowledge and
fstering
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fostering
festering
 bad
behavior
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behaviour
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.
Conclusion
To recapitulate ,
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arugment
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argument
afformative
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aforementioned
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 above ,one can reach to
conculusion
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conclusion
conclusions
 that
into
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apply
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societ
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society
 must
be punish
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be punished
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 to prevent it.

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The essay lacks a clear and logical structure, and the introduction and conclusion are underdeveloped. The main points are not well-supported, and the ideas lack coherence and cohesion.
lexical resource
The lexical resource is limited, with frequent errors in word choice, spelling, and inappropriate use of language. The vocabulary does not effectively convey the intended meaning.
grammatical range
There are numerous grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, word order, and sentence structure. The range of grammatical structures is also limited.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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