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You live in a block of flats; your neighbour makes a lot of noise which has caused problems for you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter, you should: explain the situation tell him/her how you are effected by this Suggest what you want the landlord to do.

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Dear sir, I am Steven Jone. I am newly shifted
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 your block of flats
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 week, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I am getting a lot of disturbance from my neighbour making a lot of noise which has caused so many issues for me. For 24 hours there is sound from that room, they have a small baby, he will cry
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 night
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 from morning their alarm will start ringing till 8 AM, Because of that I can not sleep at night properly , as my sleep is not proper day time I can not concentrate on my study. from next week I have my exam
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 in the evening time There will be a loud television sound. Please tell
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my neighbour to watch the TV
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 less sound and take care of their child which will not disturb
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 if
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 not possible please arrange for me
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 flat because it is affecting my
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 very badly please consider my problem and take some action as soon as possible Yours faithfully steven
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task response
Focus on providing a clear and complete response to the task prompt. Address all aspects of the situation, effects, and suggested actions in a more detailed and organized manner.
coherence cohesion
Maintain a logical structure throughout the letter. Also, ensure that the greeting and closing are appropriate and formal. Use paragraphing to present a single idea per paragraph effectively.
lexical resource
Expand your range of vocabulary to express the situation, effects, and suggestions more effectively. Also, pay attention to word choice, spelling, and accuracy.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure, word order, and grammatical accuracy. Review the use of verb tenses and sentence formation for clarity and coherence.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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