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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extend do you agree or disagree.

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It is claimed by some people that the death
penalty
 benefits a nation. I completely disagree with
this
 opinion and
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 essay I will state the reasons for my view. The most significant reason for holding
this
 opinion is to make the criminals
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realise
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 gilt. Some people argue that the judicial system is not impeccable, and there is a risk of executing innocent individuals. The irreversible nature of
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penalty
 leaves no room for correcting errors, and
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 of wrongful convictions have raised doubt about the reliability of the legal system. Another reason for my view is that there is insufficient empirical evidence to support the claim that capital punishment effectively deters crime more than alternative forms of judgment. Many argue that focusing on crime caution through education and rehabilitation may be more effective.
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capital punishment is viewed by some as a tool to maintain social order by removing individuals
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 incommutable or too dangerous to be part of society.
This
 perspective underlines the importance of protecting the general populace from those who pose a significant threat. In conclusion, the question of whether
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penalty
 is good for a country is debatable. Striking a balance between the persecution of justice and
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 of human rights is essential in evaluating the relevance of dead
penalty
 within a societal context. Ultimately, the decision on the use of
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penalty
 requires careful consideration of ethical, legal, and empirical
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.
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