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Some people think it is better to have many short holidays during the year. Others believe it would be beneficial to have fewer, longer vacations. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words. Adapted

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There are people who believe that it is better to have many short
holidays
 during the year.
While others
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Others
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 think there are more advantages than backwards to
have
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having
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 fewer,
however
, longer vacations. Let's get started with the benefits of having many short
holidays
 or days off. The first reason is when you have a lot of short
holidays
 you will never be that tired or stressed. Periodic rest makes you well rested,
calm
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and calm
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. As an example, my parents have tried both options. In my opinion, when they had many short days off they, actually, were more calm and kind to me and my sister. What about rare and long
holidays
, I see only
one
 privilege.
That is
, obviously, exactly
long
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a long
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holidays
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holiday
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. You can fully enjoy your vacation, take a deep breath and relax from
work
.
However
,
as a result
,
due to
 a long-term
holiday
Add a comma
holiday,
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 it probably will be hard to start
work
 again. There are at least two reasons why. The first
one
 is that you will get used to your
day
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daily
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 routine when it should not
work
. The second
one
 is that your previous period of life was just terrible. You were working without
holidays
 for a long time, your mood has always been bad, because of a great amount of
work
. To illustrate, 2 weeks ago I had a 1 week holiday in another city. For me
one
 week of vacation is big enough,
that is
 why I experienced it all backwards.
To sum up
, there are some good and some bad reasons why people should choose
one
 or another type of their life, but
personally
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personally,
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 I would rather choose small
holidays
 every 2 or 3 weeks
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task response
Focus on providing a balanced discussion of both views and give a clear opinion. Ensure that the introduction and conclusion clearly present the ideas and include relevant examples to support your points.
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