The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
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The table illustrates the number of guests to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was renewed
while
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the charts give information about the results of surveys asking guests how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same time.
Overall
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, the number of visitors experienced growth and the total of satisfied people increased after the year. Before the rebuilding of the museum nearly half of the nation was dissatisfied form their visit with 40% of the chart and the highest and only 30% of visitors being satisfied.
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, after refurbishment 40% were satisfied and 35% were very satisfied.
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, the proportion of the dissatisfied group decreased by 25% and the dissatisfied by 5%. The sum of visitors from 74000 increased significantly to 92000 in refurbishment which is 18000 more than past.
however
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, the rate of No response people remains a 5% in both periods of time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • refurbishment
  • visitor statistics
  • satisfaction survey
  • seasonal trends
  • demographics
  • benchmarking
  • feedback mechanisms
  • amenities
  • exhibitions
  • customer experience
  • turnaround
  • user engagement
  • footfall
  • improvements
  • disparities
  • perception
  • enhancements
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