The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared. Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.

The charts below show the results of a survey of adult education. The first chart shows the reasons why adults decide to study. The pie chart shows how people think the cost of adult education should be shared.

Write a report for a university lecturer, describing the information shown below.
The diagram chart depicts the percentages of seven reasons
of
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adults
in
education
,
while
the pie chart gives the proportion of how three different
adults
people
thinks
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think
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of
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apply
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their
cost
of
education
should be shared. Generally, most
of
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apply
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adults
have the intention
in
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of
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education
because they
are interest
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are interested
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in
subject
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the subject
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more than
to meet
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in meeting
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people. Meanwhile, the individual more consider sharing their
cost
of study than
taxpayer
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the taxpayer
a taxpayer
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.
Initially
, the interest in
subject
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the subject
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catch
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catches
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adults
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adults'
adult's
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motivation in
education
that has 40% which is the highest number of
survey
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the survey
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if
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apply
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reasons.
Then
it was followed by to gain qualifications at 38%. Helpful for
current
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a current
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job which is the next reason for
adults
to continue their study is in 22%,
while
to improve
prospect
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the prospect
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of promotion, and enjoy learning/studying have the same proportions at 20%.
Additionally
, to be able to change
job
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jobs
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and to meet people has the lowest percentages of reasons for grown person (12% and 9% respectively).
Next,
individual
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the individual
an individual
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is the highest part in choosing
cost
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the cost
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of each course that should be
pay
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paid
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(40%).
Then
Employer
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the Employer
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is the next one who intends to do the
cost sharing
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cost-sharing
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which had 35%. Yet, there is just 25% of
Taxpayer
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Taxpayers
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who want to share the
cost
of each course.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words adults, education, cost with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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