Number of tourists visiting a Caribbean island(2010-2017)

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The graph compares the
quantity
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number
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of visitors who came to a Caribbean
island
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over the period of seven years( 2010-2017).
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, what stands out from the graph is that the total number of tourists, visiting Caribbean
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island
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islands
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always increased during the given period.
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, the figure for visitors staying on cruise ships was lower than that
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who
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those who
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decided to choose
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on
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island
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the island
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. Looking at the highest rate, the
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total
number of
new comers
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newcomers
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showed
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exactly 1 million in 2010, before increasing slightly to
2.5millions
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2.5 million
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in
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till
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2014 and
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figure remained stable at around
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2.7 million
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2.7 million
in the following year, before reaching a
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peak
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pick
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at
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3.5 million
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3.5 million
in 2017. Turning to the lower rates, people who chose cruise ships mostly experienced a level off in 2010, 2011 and from 2013 to 2015 (
1.5millions
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1.5 million
) and witnessed a small drop in 2016, but increased to
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1.5 million
in the following year.
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the number of travellers staying on
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island
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the island
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were
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was
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lower than
1million
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1 million
till 2014,
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,
this
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rate showed a slight increase till the end of the given period.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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