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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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The world that we live in today is dominated by advertising.
Adverts
 are on television, on the World Wide Web,
in
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 the street and even on our mobile phones.
However
, many of the strategies used to sell a product or service can be considered immoral or unacceptable.
To begin
 with, the fact that we cannot escape from advertising is a significant cause for complaint. Constant images and signs wherever we look can be very intrusive and irritating at times. Take
for example
 advertising on the mobile phone. With the latest
technology
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 mobile companies are now able to send advertising messages via SMS to consumers' phones whenever they choose.
Although
 we expect
adverts
 in numerous situations, it now seems that there are very few places we can actually avoid them. A
further
 aspect of advertising that I would consider unethical is the way that it encourages people to buy
products
 they may not need or cannot afford. Children and young people
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in particular
 are influenced by
adverts
 showing the latest toys, clothing or music and
this
 can put enormous pressure on the parents to buy these
products
.
In addition
, the advertising of tobacco
products
 and alcohol has long been a controversial issue, but cigarette
adverts
 have only recently been banned in many countries. It is quite possible that alcohol
adverts
 encourage excessive consumption and underage drinking, yet restrictions have not been placed on
this
 type of advertising in the same way as smoking. It is certainly true to say that advertising is an everyday feature of our lives.
Therefore
, people are constantly being encouraged to buy
products
 or services that might be too expensive, unnecessary or even unhealthy. In conclusion, many aspects of advertising do appear to be morally wrong and are not acceptable in today's society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Unethical
  • Unacceptable
  • Deceptive
  • Exaggerated
  • Misleading
  • Manipulation
  • Vulnerable
  • Targeted advertising
  • Perpetuation
  • Societal norms
  • Stereotypes
  • Negative body image
  • Intrusion of privacy
  • Data-driven
  • Over-saturation
  • Desensitization
  • Annoyance
  • Greenwashing
  • Eco-conscious
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