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When talking about success, we often think of people who are rich or famous. In your opinion, what are the qualities that characterise a successful person? Why do you think these should be the criteria? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is very common for people to confuse success with popularity or wealth. In my opinion,
hard-working
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 populace who
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 unyielding attitude towards their ultimate aim,
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 most likely to be unfazed in challenging times and pursue with
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 enthusiasm for their
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. The most high achievers demonstrate traits
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hard work
 and persistence.
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 it is true that success may come easy to a few luckier ones, the majority of successful people expend a lot of
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efforts
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 and time to accomplish their
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 to rise to the rank of a celebrated chef, Gordon
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 has confessed to
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 100 hours a week in the fledgling days of his career.
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, people often quit on their dreams
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 a lack of willpower to survive in adverse situations;
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,
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 mandates a person to demonstrate relentlessness in
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 to prevail in his
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. The devotion to one's targets and tenacious
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 are the most important factors to succeed in
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 world. Working tirelessly ensures enough practice and the experience which is necessitated in
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 to gain any expertise.
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, a typical graduate needs many years of
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stellar performance and work experience in
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 to become the CEO of a company. These higher positions are highly competitive and impart a sense of accomplishment among those who exhibit the mettle to thrive in their
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.
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 individuals do not succumb to pressure
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and display an unwavering focus and continue their relentless
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 to accomplish their
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.
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 their odds of attaining success. In conclusion,
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surviving
 and thriving in one's pursuit are the most important attributes of successful
personalities
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; which necessitates not only enormous
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,
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but
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persistence in
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 to chase down
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goals
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 that, are set by an individual.
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